iPhone 7.

So, being blunt, I didn’t end up clicking any links because I wasn’t hooked and there was too much to read. There needs to be a single line that defines what makes your product great at the very top that convinces your users that it’s worth going further.

As someone who has gone through lots of job searches, I haven’t used paper submissions in decades so implying that your software is better at tracking than paper makes it seem super outdated. Focus on why it is valuable to the user and sell it in a single statement.