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Visulth t1_jb4wz94 wrote

Reply to comment by blood-soaked-earth in [WP] - The vampire steps out, and his daughters cower and kneel where they stand. You ready yourself for the fight. Before you can raise your weapon, though, the vampire sighs, and with an embarrassed tone, says, “I’m really quite sorry for the trouble…” by X01Eagle

Thank you, that's very good feedback.

My ego wants to say it's a first draft / I was rushing / the sun was in my eyes -- but no, I totally get what you mean. I'll definitely think about that a bit more when I write.

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