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SpeaksYourWord t1_jedh0rx wrote

Reply to comment by Go-to-bed_Good-Night in [WP] You been feeling really low energy recently. So much that you don't even want to go and fight your nemesis. Suddenly, you hear a knocking at your door, it's your nemesis. "Hey you haven't been around to fight recently, are you ok? Can I get you something?" by Masterpotato002

Excellent post.

My only critique;

>"What? They were comfy!"

This does not fit with the rest of your narrative style.

You go from addressing a wide audience to addressing a 1 on 1.

I get what you were going for, and I think you would find better reception if you described why the protagonist didn't care and maybe gave a brief description as to why their attire was comfortable enough to escape embarrassment.

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Go-to-bed_Good-Night t1_jee3iux wrote

Thanks for this! I was definitely struggling with the style here, so your critique is much appreciated.

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