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chacham2 OP t1_jd2xe6j wrote

Reply to comment by TerrificTooMan in [SP] A curse placed upon you reveals to anyone what you are thinking of when you interact with them. by chacham2

The setting and interaction between the characters was beautiful.

Critique? I'm not a big fan of the style, i didn't find the story itself to be that interesting, and i didn't like the mildly crude word in the first of your three posts. But i have to repeat: The setting and interaction between the characters was beautiful.

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TerrificTooMan t1_jd3tpwj wrote

I may not be asking this right, but what precisely did you not find interesting, or was this just not the kind of story you expected?

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chacham2 OP t1_jd4g0rr wrote

I read it to my wife last night (the first post) and we both kind of lost interest. The idea and interaction was nice, blowing away clouds, and having someone that close and dear. But, in the middle we couldn't tell 100% what was going on. Also, not sure if this means anything, but when i was reading it aloud, it didn't flow 100%.

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TerrificTooMan t1_jd4vf4e wrote

Yeah, reading it back over again, I think I see what you're getting at. Thanks for taking the time to discuss this, your feedback is greatly appreciated!

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chacham2 OP t1_jd4vvlv wrote

Wow, i didn't think you'd actually like my feedback. I just wanted to show appreciation for you taking the time to write it. :)

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