Hey Lively!

Heck yeah, she's so got this.

I loved how from the start, we get the sense that something else is going on underneath. The language that you use, the way our character manipulates the situation and people around her to get to the story she's looking for.

I also really like the irony of the slogan. And the way you bring it back at the end and actually give it the sense that it's true this time.

I also think you did a great job of characterising John and even the boss in this. Even though we don't see much of the latter, you do a good job of giving us a picture of what he's like. So very well done!

I do just have a few bits and bobs for you,

> With relief I snapped the laptop closed, eager to answer the call of my personal laptop beckoning me home so my real work could begin.

Just a little bit of repetition of "laptop" here. I think simply going for something like "computer" could work just as well and avoid repetition.

> his piggy eyes running all over my body like slime,

Similarly, there was just a bit of repetition of "piggy eyes" here and with the boss. Just stood out to me. If you want to keep it, you could insinuate that the boss and John are related I suppose. Father and son, thereby explaining why he acts as he does. But just a small thought I had whilst typing this.

> Damn, he worked fast!

I'm not too sure what this meant. Are you saying that she was surprised he sprung the drinks thing so soon? Because it seemed pretty reasonable to me, as it's said that they were taking the new girl out for drinks. But not sure.

> I carefully lined my oversized handbag with a heavy-duty plastic bag to pour all the drinks I was not about to drink

Again, just a bit of repetition of "drink" here. No biggie.

> “Fighting for Fairness!”, I raised my fist into the air and exclaimed, “Oh yes I am. This is for you Sarah!”.

This felt a bit silly to me. First off, shouldn't she be afraid of someone overhearing? Or has everyone left already? And even if they had, it still is a bit strange, no? I don't know, might just be me.

YTB!

I hope this helps.

Good Words!