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[deleted] t1_iu017ul wrote

Reply to comment by [deleted] in [WP]No one know how the zombie virus began, but humanity is on the ropes. A powerful stranger cuts through the horde one night and reaches your compound's wall with a deal. Vampires are starving. Help feed them in exchange for protection from the other undead menace. by cesly1987

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[deleted] t1_iu02983 wrote

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[deleted] t1_iu03fl2 wrote

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Crystal1501 t1_iu05mf4 wrote

I've heard a good rule that commas allow for a quick breath, full stops a proper breath. No human could read that sentence without needing a quick breath.

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[deleted] t1_iu07b1x wrote

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Crystal1501 t1_iu07lee wrote

Even if that's the case, the other guy was trying to give you helpful advice and I feel you were being rude and disrespectful in return. I feel the same way as them, and your attitude was just uncalled for.

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Crystal1501 t1_iu01rwq wrote

Until you posted the sequel, they were right, the story didn't follow the prompt. I only knew a sequel was coming because without the sequel, this just wasn't reflecting the prompt.

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[deleted] t1_iu0244t wrote

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Crystal1501 t1_iu02uhv wrote

The prompt mentioned a deal. You ended with 'a vampire has infiltrated'. I know prompts are a guide, I've seen it myself where my prompts weren't answered to the letter, and I've also done it myself. But you missed the key part of the prompt - the deal. If someone says 'village', it doesn't literally mean a village, but you can't choose the middle of a forest!

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[deleted] t1_iu07hnt wrote

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Crystal1501 t1_iu07t72 wrote

Then you're on the wrong subreddit. Plain and simple, you are. The only thing that kept me from saying anything originally was the fact I was EXPECTING a sequel so you COULD fulfil the prompt.

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