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AShellfishLover t1_it3y31z wrote

Reply to comment by AShellfishLover in [WP] Contrary to stereotypes, orcs are well educated, unscrupulously honest, and highly intelligent. Their society values strength as the final arbiter of justice over rationality. Thus they want absolutely nothing to do with a defeated female knight. by Genevieve_Griselda

She readied herself for her deserved death with the calm of a penitent. So many things fell into place. The beastknight rushed towards her... then past, grabbing up the young girl and her brother in his arms and letting out a roar that shook the dust from the walls of the hiding place. The hordesmen answered, and she heard the swell fill the temple.

More beasts began to flood the room, two tattooed healers looking over the children, another trying to staunch the blood flowing from the healer the Guardian had run through. As the beastknight rocked its children back and forth, she heard the monster letting out a low prayer.

Gaad ti'Shilul-zorad, saniadai uldrod busul rosharichad, filpra-nod brandul mamadal siatazor. Blessed Mother of Quiet Places, I call to you your blessed mercy, hear my prayer, your loyal servant, though I am far from my homeland.

She looked at the armor the beastknight wore, and saw the enamel working on their breastplate. A green set of clawed hands, holding the earth between its fingers.

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Gaelhelemar t1_it6rji3 wrote

It was at this moment she realized she had fucked up. There’s more to this, right? She hasn’t yet been set upon by the Horde for murder/mercy killing or chastised by them.

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Bealf t1_it6wz0u wrote

Soooooo, this is really good! Any chance of a final act or an explanation for why she didn’t realize the kids were orc kids? I’m a little confused at that part.

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AShellfishLover t1_it95cts wrote

I give myself an hr with a prompt and then bounce to something new or back to work on my own work/actually employment.

The commenter below pretty much got it. In my mind's eye the Faith has indoctrinated our protag into not seeing herself for who she is, with the High Priest using a glammer to alter her perception. If I decided to work on this piece I'd add clarity, but this and other stuff I post are sprints to get ready for Nanowrimo on another project.

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Bealf t1_it9xbed wrote

Fair enough! Thanks for checking back in!

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Gaelhelemar t1_it9ybzo wrote

And here I was thinking that the Orcs worshipped the same god as the knight did, and so it upended her worldview to learn that their "bloodthirsty goddess" was literally her own god.

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AShellfishLover t1_it9yg9m wrote

It's also that as well. You see, like other Green-skinned creatures that start with O, it has layers.

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DarkKechup t1_it7ghy0 wrote

I think she was Orc, too, no? Indoctrinated to think she was human? Or did I misunderstand?

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Bealf t1_it8m5vq wrote

I believe you are correct

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