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poiyurt t1_ixqafmh wrote

Reply to comment by Ingavar_Oakheart in [WP] The knight can't believe it, his Noble steed from the Royal Stables, capable, loyal, who went on so many adventures together, just transformed into the princess. She remembers it all and she has something to say to the knight by Commander_Night_17

Thank you for your praise! That was certainly the intention of repeating that little section, and I'm glad to know it worked.

It could definitely flow better, I agree. I've pretty much never written poetry before, I think I could count all my attempts on one hand. But once I had the idea for the story, writing out in prose just somehow felt wrong, like it could only exist in this form to evoke the right ideas. Plus at some point you can't really revise the flow anymore because you've read it too many times haha.

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Genevieve_Griselda t1_ixqr6qb wrote

it's like those songs that folks sing of tales of old, like "Scarborough fair".

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