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London-Roma-1980 t1_iwmdldz wrote

Reply to comment by rayonymous in [TT] Theme Thursday - Wholesome by AliciaWrites

Ooh, I like this, very Star Trek feeling to it in a good way.

One thing I'd note: if Sir Malcolm has indeed commandeered several missions, I'm surprised he's allowed to pilot at all. The word you want is "commanded". "Commandeered" means hijacked. It took nothing from the story, though.

A little too bad it ended on the cliffhanger of what the secret was, but word count gonna word count. I'd love to see you expand this in a [PI], though!

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rayonymous t1_iwmifuc wrote

Star Trek Is the inspiration. Indeed it was difficult to come to an end due to the word count. Now that you've mentioned it I'll try to expand this bit in some time. And English is not my first language, I'll have to be careful with my word choice, lol. Thanks for reading and your valuable crit.

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