Submitted by chacham2 t3_10jinpg in WritingPrompts
English_American t1_j5kzudf wrote
"Sign here, here, and..." blackened fingers traced down the page as I searched for the final signature. "Ah, yes, here."
As I looked back down to my own papers, shuffling through the patient's information and the woman's request, she hemmed and hawed.
"Is there a problem?" I asked, my eyes staying on my papers as I read through the request.
"It says here seventy-two hours, I thought we agreed on-"
"Yes, three days; twenty-four hours a day times three days is seventy-two hours." I reminded her, it was always apparent in my patient's families that wealth may buy happiness, but it could not buy them a brain. The woman remained silent as her pen glided along the lines, signing a significant sum of money over to me. When she clicked the pen, I reached out for the papers and nodded to my customer.
"I appreciate your business. The resurgere will take place tomorrow morning at eight seventeen exactly, no earlier, no later. Please have any who would like to witness the resurgere present no earlier than five minutes beforehand. Your..." I glanced down to the papers for a reminder, "husband will return for exactly seventy-two hours. It is highly recommended that he is present, here, by his regressus time. If he is not, please ensure he is in a place that is easily accessible, and as noted in the contract, an additional fee of 10% of your total will be incurred for an absentia fee." The woman nodded along as I spoke, her mind clearly elsewhere. Formailties.
I walked the woman out, and as she left, I waved. The least I could do for a woman paying me more than a year's average salary of a CEO.
The next morning, the resurgere was nearly ready. My garb, a black gown with subtle inlays of crimson Latin phrases, had been prepared the prior evening after my customer departed. The husband's body was placed on the large stone tablet in the middle of the room. The tablet was something to see, it was black. Not simply black, like soot, or smoke, but a void. Looking into the stone was almost as if looking into nothing.
Incense had been burned for the past half hour, giving the room an even more legitimate feel. I waited, hands clasped, as the family began to enter the room. My hood was down, I never liked putting it up unless the family was into the ornate, or the... eclectic arts.
This family was not. It was just the wife and who I could only assume were her children present. After they entered, and glanced uneasily over to me, I began my ritual.
"Confer nobis animam Johannis Aurifabri." I began, my words echoing through the chamber. An orange-red glow appeared around the black void of a tablet. "In loco illius sume per tres dies meam, et per tres dies ad tuum dominium redibit." The glow traveled through the stone, and into the body. As the body began to convulse, I uttered my final words. "Dum anima liberorum vagatur in regno, mea erit in tuo servitio, mi Domine."
I saw his eyes open as mine closed.
Three days later, at exactly eight seventeen in the morning, I awoke, standing just where I was when I departed in his place. His wife was there, holding onto a limp hand attached to a now lifeless corpse. She gasped in shock when I appeared in the cloud of black smoke.
When she regained her composure, she nodded and thanked me again.
After she left, I took a seat next to John. His was a life long lived, a life full of pain and suffering. Not his own, but inflicted upon others. For three long days, I took his place. For three long days, I labored, I suffered. It was worth it though... four hundred and fifty thousand dollars for three days in Hell.
It's always worth it.
chacham2 OP t1_j5l8acs wrote
Wow, well written. Thank you for that excellent reply!
> she hummed and hawed.
I thought it was hem and haw.
/me searches
Hum and haw is the British equivalent of hem and haw. Then again, i thought "English_American" meant American English, but i guess that isn't the case. :)
English_American t1_j5l8i6l wrote
Thanks for the correction, in all honesty I wrote that as my final class was finishing up for the day and I had students asking me a ton of questions so I was distracted! Fixed.
And thank you! Excellent prompt!
Benjii_44 t1_j5lkd74 wrote
Good to know that the teachers also spend thier time on reddit
English_American t1_j5lp16u wrote
Yep! Well, the students were finishing up a movie today so it’s not like I was ignoring them lol.
chacham2 OP t1_j5l8tt9 wrote
> I was distracted
Imagine if you weren't... I hope i see some of your replies again.
S4njay t1_j5msqlv wrote
Lmao what, I did not expect this response!
Omen224 t1_j5mdtyd wrote
I wonder if the narrator in question ever offers a refund for those who go to heaven instead. 3 day vacation and such. I would definitely offer at least a partial refund.
FlyMega t1_j5mjxzb wrote
No way for them to know, why not just pocket the cash? I mean, if you’re a necromancer no reason to give back the money… yknow
Omen224 t1_j5mkgcg wrote
As incentive to have more of my richer clients behave. Not only out of egotistic altruism, but also to improve the possibility of a repeat experience.
TheCreatorCrew t1_j5mlk40 wrote
Excellent writing! I didn’t even think about trading places, great use of the prompt. Does the Latin mean anything in particular?
English_American t1_j5mq4ti wrote
It does! Something along the lines of:
> Give us the soul of John the Goldsmith. In his place, take mine for three days, and in three days it will return to your possession. While the soul of the free wanders in the kingdom, mine will be in your service, my Lord.
Trans_Space_Beans t1_j5ma8wb wrote
Wow.... just wow
Diptam t1_j5o1zdf wrote
I love how the Latin foreshadows the last abstract, well done!
QuirkAlchemist t1_j5mr5ws wrote
All the money in the world couldn't convince me to spend a second in hell
MechisX t1_j5nfpap wrote
That took a dark turn but it is nice to see even a necromancer understands there is always and exchange or price involved.
SamRivett t1_j5o13oz wrote
Very interesting! A good addiction (and side character) could be that his body remain unconscious and someone (like a secretary) that take of the body for the time he is away. In this way there would be possibilities to develop even relationships
Mulanisabamf t1_j5o6wpt wrote
Noice.
SolidBiker3000 t1_j5v9r2a wrote
Good response
Does anyone know what the words mean
English_American t1_j5yr38p wrote
> Give us the soul of John the Goldsmith. In his place, take mine for three days, and in three days it will return to your possession. While the soul of the free wanders in the kingdom, mine will be in your service, my Lord.
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