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aurathegodbody t1_j6jh5mw wrote

{p o em )

‘Christ’

Sword to neck, face bloodied, like what in the fawk.

This time last year he was a goddamn champion

Now look at this bum.

I mean I kept tabs,

(Mainly at bars)

But last time I peeked in on this guy

He was ragdolling people

Claiming conqueror and all that

He couldn’t see me,

I wouldn’t allow myself to be visible

Until just the right moment.

The monarch or the knight whoever it was

Was yelling in his mother tongue

Something about something about an affair

I laughed couldn’t help it

This guy would summon me when his tool

Couldn’t stay in the shed

I had to wait a little while longer

The power of the transfer would only work

When ironically he was inches away spiritually from death

One second left....

And Bang!

I transferred him to three weeks ago.

To the exact time when he was about to commit the treason

Hopefully he makes the right choice.

And Off to another bar I go....

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wandering_cirrus t1_j6llkoc wrote

It's fun that you decided to do a poem response! Also the narrator's tough love attitude is quite funny. Thanks for writing!

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aurathegodbody t1_j6llwpm wrote

It’s funny because when I wrote it I thought short and sweet would do it more justice for how the narration of it was going to go.

Tbh I didn’t know all the way that it was going to tie in properly but it did towards the end.

But all’s well that ends well I guess #thanks4reading

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