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IndigoMichigan t1_j8oni62 wrote on February 15, 2023 at 9:08 PM

Reply to comment by AgentElman in TIL that the phrase "It was a dark and stormy night" was the opening line to an actual novel published in 1830, but runs on for another 51 words: "It was a dark and stormy night; the rain fell in torrents — except at occasional intervals, when it was checked by a violent gust of wind which..." by dylancatlow

If he cut out the middle and put:

"It was a dark and stormy night; the rain fell in torrents, checked by violent gusts of wind which swept up the streets of London".....etc.

I feel that keeps the sentence more lean.